awake awake
the annoying things I
recognise, see in
others mirror my
own miserable
mistakes the habits I haven’t yet tamed
the bits I’ve missed, fester haunting me
awake awake
now I must deal with them
totally transform
these nasty habits
for they harm me more
than those on the receiving end, others,
those repelled or alienated from me
d’Verse, duodora, Lisa of Tao Talk
The Duodora is: a quatorzain made up of 2 septets; syllabic, 4/6/5/5/5/10/10 syllables per line.
rhymed Axxxxxb Axxxxxb L1 is repeated as a refrain that begins the 2nd stanza. x is unrhymed.
mother moon illuminates my mistakes … my pic
aroused 
It is profound and brilliant – your poem, the new form of it and your message! Other people are our mirror – it is only some who make it a personal responsibility to do their own work for what they might judge in others.
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I know that my own worst attributes, the ones I either choose not to work on, or the ones I won’t “awake” and acknowledge as being bad habits, are the ones that keep presenting themselves to me. They are like shadows. Do you know that children’s poem about shadows that starts, “I have a little shadow that goes in and out with me, and what can be the use of him is more than I can see…”?
P.S. Wonderful and wise duodora, Kate. Extra candy corn for you 🙂
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We always see our own faults the clearest. (K)
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True. But also just because we see them doesn’t mean we do anything about them.
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You made a good point that the faults we see in others are often our own as well!
Very well done Kate.
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I like how the poem’s format focused inward – one’s reflections of their mistakes and how it affects others. Hopefully we can overcome those nasty habits in the long run.
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It takes a strong person to acknowledge their own faults. Well done Kate. We are all guilty of something.
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This is a wonderful message, Kate! You have mastered a complicated form and communicated so effectively!. ❤
Seeing your own faults is a difficult exercise. It's so much easier to identify the faults of others. But seeing your own faults enables you to make needed changes. Criticizing others can be counterproductive, but a good example is a positive influence.
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Beautiful poem Kate. Love your message here.
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A form new to me! The description makes it seem difficult but you did a superb job! Makes me think I should give it a try…. I was told that we mostly dislike those things in others that we dislike most in ourselves! I do believe it is true.
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Another tricky poetry form. It is so true our bad habits hurt us more than others. They of course hurt others, cause they are repelled from us. Others see what we can’t often see. Self transformation and insight is a wonderful thing to help us improve. A beautiful poem inspiring inner work.
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Fantastic poem, Kate. Love the flow and the message. Wonderful.
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Wow and true words of knowing who we really are. Too good 👌👌👌👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼
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The worst kind of haunting is the type done by our own regrets and inadequacies. I will add a full size candy bar to the extra candy corn from Lisa! This is so well done with the form and the message. Bravo, Kate! 🍫🍬🍭🎃
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Mistakes are just lessons still to be learnt. Beautifully done Kate 🙂
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So true! A powerful reminder! What isn’t apart of us doesn’t disturb us.
Beautiful moon photo. I often commune with the moon. Such a good listener! 🙂
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PS…
“Everything that irritates us about others can lead us to an understanding of ourselves”. – Carl Jung
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Wonderfully put forward Kate.. we all have something inside us more prone..
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I like the shot. Where was it taken? It goes well with your poem.
About recognizing a fault, is it easy when we see it in others? A haunting is a relatable word.
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on my 2017 visit to Nepal, coming back late one night the moon was so bright … this is one of a few photos I’ve taken with my phone and the quality is not good but I still like it 🙂
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I have heard that what annoys us in others, are faults that are true of ourselves. Yes, we must try to improve. Well done, Kate. You have expressed it eloquently.
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You’re right, Kate, the faults we recognise in others can teach us much about ourselves!
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Oh, yes. So interesting when we get annoyed with someone else for who they act/what they say, and then we realize we’re really annoyed with ourselves, because we’ve done the same. A great lesson in watching our reactions to others, and learning from them. What a great Duodora.
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I wish I had a dollar for every mistake I made … might be bordering on millionaire status. You aced the form, which is one of the more difficult i think.
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Excellent poem…great words of wisdom here. Awesome picture…we have all had those sleepless nights beneath the moon.
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Not easy to acknowledge our own faults. But then you are exceptional, sis. Well done.
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Nicely done, Kate! And so true….when we allow others to bother us, we’re only hurting ourselves. I think often what bothers me most in other people is when I see my own faults in them!
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This is incredibly deep and wise. The acts of others and our reactions to them convey a lot about how we think and feel about things in general. For me, it is selfishness that grabs first place. And so, I try not to be like them.
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Kate, your boldness in discovering and crafting poetry in different styles allows us to take a glance at our own selves.
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Good application of the form to the prompt! What is that phrase???? “There but for the grace of God go I.”
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A beautiful form kate and it worked so well ..
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