I can become much bigger
if I’m an authentic giver
enhances my kindness sliver
as helping others can deliver
a strong spinal shiver
a bit like the quiver
of an arrow passing thither
don’t drift down river
don’t wait or dither
best I deliver
dVerse, 44 words quiver, De Jackson – rhyme each line
aroused 
Wonderful use of rhyme and well made point. 🙂
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Fun rhyme here! 🙂
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thanks I enjoyed writing it 🙂
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Love the play with words and the rhymes..Made me want to reread. 🙂
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thanks for such kindness Elizabeth 🙂
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What rhyming, Kate! Not just good monorhyme but so much wisdom in each line! ❤️
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lol you must be a poet … I did know it!
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Lol Kate! I guess I am! 🙂
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you da queen of poets!
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A “sliver” of kindness, Kate, or “silver?”
For that matter, your efforts put you more at the Platinum level, not just Silver.
Ultra-Platinum Plus, or whatever gradation is the best.
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lol sorry Keith but that doesn’t rhyme with quiver … 🙂
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It does in Mixtec, and that’s sort of the whole point, isn’t it?
In fact, my Mixtec pal couldn’t even translate “thither.” He just cursed mildly, shook his head, and said, “This Kate, she must be Mayan.”
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thither is old english, willie Shakespear’s era
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Hi Keith,
hither and thither = here and there
Hi Kate,
This is one of those rare poems that has the same rhyming on every line. Well done!
I can appreciate your effort here as I personally write almost exclusively rhyming poems containing rhythmic schemes, syllabic patterns and other numeric properties and calligraphic considerations, as well as being wedded to my art, graphics and musical compositions.
May you and Keith have a lovely week and happy November!
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really appreciate you dropping by and adding your voice, thanks!
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You are very welcome, Kate. 🙂
I would like to inform you that I have replied to you with a very bespoke comment and a special message for you at http://soundeagle.wordpress.com/2017/10/18/the-quotation-fallacy/#comment-10575
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aha then you are also an accomplished tech head … heading over now, thanks!
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Dear Kate,
I have some very short and sweet poems that are similar to yours as they all use the same end rhymes like yours in this post.
You can find those poems of mine at https://soundeagle.wordpress.com/2012/09/05/soundeagle-in-art-and-poetry/
I would certainly like to receive some feedback from you there. The said post also explains how I composed one of the main poems there. 🙂
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love them thanks, left my comment there 🙂
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So much fun in this…
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You play up with words so beautifully always kate..and i love the message of the poem here….and that arrow?..i hope it gets through to many.
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me too Mich, how are you?
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Love the message! Love the idea of an arrow…an arrow that can touch a heart and change a life. Great poem!!!
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thanks so much Linda!
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Your arrows aim straight! 🙂
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The sound of rhyme gives rhythm to the poem . Great message, Kate.
Love ❤
Michel
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thanks so much Michel 🙂
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Wow nice and beautiful rhyming words, Kate and the picture too was so lovely.
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Giving is so important, just that we need to learn about when and how and to whom.
Life is beautiful.
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well said thanks Rupali, so true!
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Your rhyming is superb as always and I love your message Kate. Hope you’re doing well. xx
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Enjoyed this poem a lot! Lovely
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thanks so much!
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The monorhyme is underrated – it is more difficult than it looks and you managed with a moral lesson to boot!
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thanks so much for your kind words … I love a challenge 🙂
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It is good to be an authentic giver.
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heal us and others Frank 🙂
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Your quiver’s arrows are right on target again … xx
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lol thanks Ivor, I am a straight shooter 🙂
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OH! What an excellent, fun, wonderful poem, SweetKate! 🙂 I read it aloud to Coops and he loved it, too!
You are an amazing giver, care-giver and forgiver who is filled with vigor!
So, keep taking good care of your liver and watch out for chiggers!
❤ and HUGS!!! 🙂
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lol missed vigor … rewrite may be necessary 🙂
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🙂 Vigor be good! 🙂
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lol good play on the word 🙂
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But probably really bad grammar! HA! 😀 I like using silly grammar. Ha! 😀
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lol fun is far important that gramma 🙂
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Some very impressive rhyming work! And of course a lovely poem.
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thanks MB, love it when I can make a little rhyme 🙂
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🙂 🙂 🙂
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